Mum, Dad, Hannah, Callum, Brodie, me and the Santy family - Estelle, Ben, Mark and Erika.
We drove down to the Oxford river/Waimak river.
Dad backed the boat and trailer into the river. Mum took
the wheel and Dad drove the jet boat off the boat.
Mum drove the truck and trailer out of the water
and the Santys did the same thing. Dad and Mark
yelled out “hurry up” we all jumped in the boats and set off down river. Dad said there is no point to go up river more because there was a pebble garden up ahead so we all spun around and went back up river and found
a swimming hole. Estelle and I had a look on the other
side of the swimming hole. I was walking along the sand
and then I fell in knee deep sinking sand and so did Estelle. We swam back to the other side of the swimming hole and started jumping off the back of the
boats in to the deep cold water only with shorts on.
Then we had some lunch I had a sandwich and chips then we went back and put the boat on the trailer. Then we got ice creams from the Darfield dairy.
Hi Luke
ReplyDeleteWow, what a fantastic day you have described - full of action. I don't think I would cope very well with the cold water, but the ice-creams on the way home would have been cold enough for me!
You've done a good lot of writing here, and my suggestion would be to remember to break up some of the ideas into groups and paragraphs. You might remember my tip to use a double line space between paragraphs to make lots of words easier to read.
I'm sure you'll have a lot more adventures to tell us about, and it will be great to see you sharing some of your learning from school, too. Perhaps you can take a good photo showing the rule of thirds for your next trip!
Carol